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Category > English Posted 29 Aug 2017 My Price 10.00

How to make this poem better based on word choice and sentence?

a Snail

 

Center of my grandma's courtyard

 

A charming plain tree has grew for years

 

I spent my whole day, observing 

 

Beneath its canopy, observing its fears

 

I was told, curiosity is dream. I was five

 

I concentrated on a little moving life

 

Saw it carried a shell, wandering

 

A step up, in a slow speed

 

I sit on a bench, quietly pondering

 

Learning is one of the steps to dreaming. I was eight

 

By knowing little words, I still would like

 

To try reading books, they confused me

 

An English teacher came to help me

 

He told me, obviously

 

Dreams need work. I was twelve.

 

Blood, sweat, and tears

 

Little snail, carrying a shell, it climbed 

 

The azure sky is waiting for it, 

 

Slowly, as if being timed

 

I was told, snail dreams take time. I was fifteen

 

Rainstorm, lightning, and snowstorm

 

A snail is climbing up, using every second of its life

 

How the shell weighs it down

 

It deserves the shiniest sky for its strife

 

Maybe, I thought, dreams take time and work. I was 15. 

 

Time, as fickle as the heart of man

 

I work and work, but it seems

 

As close as I come, 

 

My dreams are still just dreams

 

Anyway, the little snail is my courage.

 

Already tried to do rhyme scheme.

 

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Status NEW Posted 29 Aug 2017 01:08 PM My Price 10.00

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