Peer Review Assignment 
Due Weeks 6 and 8, worth 50 points apiece

Peer reviews should provide feedback to a peer on the criteria expected in the paper. The Feedback Form can be by deaal4ireal" style="border-style: none; font-weight: bold; color: rgb(0, 136, 204); float: none; height: auto; width: auto; text-transform: uppercase; background: transparent;">DOWNLOADED from the Appendices section of the course guide by clicking the link here. Follow these instructions: 

1. Receive a classmate’s paper from your professor (in class if on-ground; via discussion thread if online). 
2. Obtain the Peer Review Feedback Form from the course shell. 
3. Comment on all criteria, noting strengths and / or areas for improvement on the feedback form. 
4. Provide completed Peer Review Feedback Form and classmate’s paper as directed by your professor. 

Note: On-ground students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor during the class meeting in which the paper is reviewed; online students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor via the course shell.

As you read a classmate’s paper, address these criteria:

1. Identify the course, assignment, and date.
2. Provide positive feedback, where appropriate, on the criteria.
3. Identify areas for improvement, where appropriate, and recommend improvements.  

The specific course learning outcomes associated with this assignment are:

• Recognize the elements and correct use of a thesis statement. 
• Recognize transitional words, phrases, and sentences.
• Identify effective sentence variety and word choice. 
• Identify positive qualities and opportunities for improvement in writing  by deaal4ireal" style="border-style: none; font-weight: bold; color: rgb(0, 136, 204); float: none; height: auto; width: auto; text-transform: uppercase; background: transparent;">SAMPLES.
• Analyze the rhetorical strategies of ethos, pathos, logos in writing samples and for incorporation into essays or presentations. 
• Correct grammatical and stylistic errors consistent with Standard Written English

  Motorcycle Helmet and Safety Law   Who really pays the price

Samantha Jeter July 28, 2014 Lisa Teitler, Instructor English 215

  The joys of riding motorcycles offer the freedom from the constraints of four-wheeled

physics and a part of being able to enjoy this particular mode of travel, one must feel confident and safe in the case of an  by deaal4ireal" style="color: rgb(0, 136, 204); border-style: none !important; font-weight: bold !important; display: inline-block !important; float: none !important; height: auto !important; min-height: 0px !important; min-width: 0px !important; width: auto !important; text-transform: uppercase !important; background: transparent !important;">EMERGENCY. 

  by deaal4ireal" style="border-style: none; font-weight: bold; color: rgb(0, 136, 204); float: none; height: auto; width: auto; text-transform: uppercase; background: transparent;">MOTORCYCLE RIDING can be fun and safe for everyone if the helmet laws were adopted for all states.  Even without a law, a motorcycle helmet should be a must have before you head out on the highway looking for a day of adventure.  So why do certain states exclude a select few motorcyclists from helmet laws that were adopted to help protect them from head injuries in case of an accident?  Did you know that Colorado, Illinois, Iowa, and New Hampshire, refuse to adopt helmet laws to protect  by deaal4ireal" style="color: rgb(0, 136, 204); border-style: none !important; font-weight: bold !important; display: inline-block !important; float: none !important; height: auto !important; min-height: 0px !important; min-width: 0px !important; width: auto !important; text-transform: uppercase !important; background: transparent !important;">DRIVERS and passengers in their state from these types of injuries?  All other states require some or all motorcyclists to wear helmets.

  As the number of motorcycle riders have increased over the last few years, rider injuries and fatalities have grown even more.  In 2012, over 4,900 motorcyclists died on the roads.  That is 15 percent of the total highway fatalities and an increase of 33 percent from 2003-2012.1  Helmets are about 37 percent effective in preventing deaths and about 67 percent effective in preventing brain injuries from motorcycle crashes.2

For those who have experienced or witnessed a head injury from a motorcycle accident, should know first-hand the effect these types of injuries have on family and friends.  Motorcycle crashes are not just measured in loss of human life.  These types of accidents create such large burdens to society, which can consume public funds for emergency responses, emergency room cost, and  by deaal4ireal" style="border-style: none; font-weight: bold; color: rgb(0, 136, 204); float: none; height: auto; width: auto; text-transform: uppercase; background: transparent;">INSURANCE PREMIUMS.  The medical cost and long term effects can be most devastating, as head injuries are the most expensive to treat.  The expenses and proper  by deaal4ireal" style="color: rgb(0, 136, 204); border-style: none !important; font-weight: bold !important; display: inline-block !important; float: none !important; height: auto !important; min-height: 0px !important; min-width: 0px !important; width: auto !important; text-transform: uppercase !important; background: transparent !important;">CARE for a  by deaal4ireal" style="color: rgb(0, 136, 204); border-style: none !important; font-weight: bold !important; display: inline-block !important; float: none !important; height: auto !important; min-height: 0px !important; min-width: 0px !important; width: auto !important; text-transform: uppercase !important; background: transparent !important;">PERSON with a serious head injury could easily cost millions of dollars.  Under these circumstances, it would seem entirely reasonable for all states to mandate motorcyclists to wear a helmet, at least to reduce the likelihood of this kind of injury.  These laws would also reduce by deaal4ireal" style="border-style: none; font-weight: bold; color: rgb(0, 136, 204); float: none; height: auto; width: auto; text-transform: uppercase; background: transparent;">INSURANCE COMPANY costs, as all riders are required to have but many may not have either  by deaal4ireal" style="border-style: none; font-weight: bold; color: rgb(0, 136, 204); float: none; height: auto; width: auto; text-transform: uppercase; background: transparent;">HEALTH INSURANCEor riders insurance.  

  A few studies provided fatality rates.  However, the  by deaal4ireal" style="border-style: none; font-weight: bold; color: rgb(0, 136, 204); float: none; height: auto; width: auto; text-transform: uppercase; background: transparent;">RECOVERY times and potential long term nature of  by deaal4ireal" style="border-style: none; font-weight: bold; color: rgb(0, 136, 204); float: none; height: auto; width: auto; text-transform: uppercase; background: transparent;">MOTORCYCLE INJURIES, an important crash outcome for survivors is disability.  Bried et al. found that 12 of their 71 hospital-admitted patients did not return to baseline functioning, while the other 59 fully  by deaal4ireal" style="border-style: none; font-weight: bold; color: rgb(0, 136, 204); float: none; height: auto; width: auto; text-transform: uppercase; background: transparent;">RECOVERED in an average of 23 weeks.3  According to the National Highway Traffic Safety Administration (NHTSA), motorcycle brain injury is three times more likely to happen for motorcyclists without a helmet than for motorcyclists wearing a helmet.3  In severe cases, these injuries can lead to permanent physical, intellectual, emotional, and social disabilities and changes which can make returning to a normal life extremely difficult for the patients and their families.

  Motorcycle ownership is currently at an all-time high, while motorcycle-related deaths and head injuries are expected to remain at these high levels unless effective laws are adopted and enforced.  Helmets are obviously the only safety measure for motorcyclists that have been proven to reduce head injuries and save lives.  The  by deaal4ireal" style="color: rgb(0, 136, 204); border-style: none !important; font-weight: bold !important; display: inline-block !important; float: none !important; height: auto !important; min-height: 0px !important; min-width: 0px !important; width: auto !important; text-transform: uppercase !important; background: transparent !important;">MOTORCYCLE HELMET law that covers all motorcycle riders, has been demonstrated to be the best way to ensure helmet use for all riders.

  As  by deaal4ireal" style="border-style: none; font-weight: bold; color: rgb(0, 136, 204); float: none; height: auto; width: auto; text-transform: uppercase; background: transparent;">DRIVERS, riders, passengers etc. we all have the opportunity to speak out about the motorcycle helmet law in your state.  We all must make wise conscience decisions when it comes to our safety as well as our health.  We must think about others whos lives and future is affected by the choices we make.  However unless you have been witnessed or have survived a head injury, you wouldn’t know or understand the effect it will have on everyone.  We often talk about the freedom of choice, but when others pay the consequences of that choice, then it’s no longer freedom of choice.

References

1. http://www.cdc.gov/motorvehiclesafety/pdf/mc2012/MotorcycleSafetyBook.pdf

2. http://www.consumerreports.org/cro/news/2011/06/state-by-state-guide-to-motorcycle-helmet-
  laws/index.htm

3. http://www.nhtsa.gov/people/injury/pedbimot/ by deaal4ireal" style="border-style: none; font-weight: bold; color: rgb(0, 136, 204); float: none; height: auto; width: auto; text-transform: uppercase; background: transparent;">MOTORCYCLE/motorcycle_html/overview.html

Motorcycle Helmet Laws in the United States From 1990 to 2005: Politics and Public Health.

Appendix A: Peer Review Feedback Form 2

Reviewer’s Name:_________________________________________ Date:_____________

Writer’s Assigned #: _______________________________________

Course:_________________________________________________ Section: ___________

Assignment 4: Persuasive Paper Part 2: Solution and Advantages

Peer reviews should provide feedback to a peer on the criteria expected in the paper. Follow these 

instructions:

1)Receive a classmate’s paper from your professor (in class if on-ground; by e-mail if online).

2)Copy the Peer Review Feedback Form from the Appendix.

3)Comment on all criteria, noting strengths and / or areas for improvement on the feedback form. 

4)Provide completed Peer Review Feedback Form and classmate’s paper to your professor. 

Note: On-ground students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor during the 

class meeting in which the paper is reviewed; online students should submit the feedback form and 

paper to the professor via the Assignment Tab in the course shell.

Criteria                                                                                             Comments

                                                                                                    +Strengths          <Areas for Improvement

1.Provide an appropriate title and an 

interesting opening paragraph to 

appeal to your stated audience (appeal 

with logic, ethics, or emotion). 

2. Include a defensible, relevant thesis 

statement in the first paragraph. (With 

revised thesis statement.)

3. Describe the history and status of the 

issue and provide an overview of the 

problem(s) that need to be addressed. 

This should be one or two (1-2) 

paragraphs.

4. Explain the first problem (economic, 

social, political, environmental, 

complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, 

etc.) and provide support for your

claims. This should be one or two (1-

2)paragraphs.

5. Explain the second problem

(economic, social, political, 

environmental, complexity, inequity, 

ethical/moral, etc.). and provide 

support for your claims. This should be 

one or two (1-2) paragraphs.

6. Explain the third problem (economic, 

social, political, environmental, 

complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, 

etc.) and provide support for your 

claims. This should be one or two (1-2)

paragraphs.

7. Use effective transitional words, 

phrases, and sentences throughout the 

paper.

8. Provide a concluding paragraph that 

summarizes the stated problems and 

promises a solution. 

9. Develop a coherently structured paper 

with an introduction, body, and 

conclusion.

10. Support claims with at least three (3) 

quality, relevant references. Use 

credible, academic sources available 

through Strayer University’s Resource 

Center.

11. Other

I need you to evaulate this paper