I am awarding full points for the draft phase of this assignment. Please observe that this does not mean the grade currently reflects A work. Instead I have added a pencil grade here or a grade you would receive if you were to hand the paper in as the final with no revisions. Please review for revision. Evelyn, I greatly appreciate your attempt at writing a difficult essay in a second language. Unfortunately right now the paper has little to no full complete accurate and understandable sentence. This makes it very difficult to provide feedback to the evaluation points you are making as the sentences are incomplete and confusing. I see you have some attempts throughout at evaluation but holistically the writing is not at a level that meets grading criteria. I would strongly encourage you to work with a tutor to help you develop the sentences and paragraphs or work with a librarian for additional help with ELL writing resources. The grade below reflects the current grade.
Scoring Rubric:
Criteria
Points
Paper is 1 ­ 2 pages in length
5/5
Paper provides a criticism of a film, television show, album, work of art, or piece of literature.
15/25
Paper provides valid arguments for why you believe the work is, or is not, worth experiencing.
15/25
Paper is free of spelling and grammar errors
1/5
Total
36/60
Good start! For revisions work on the following:
Structure: Work on a 5 section paper as explained in the live lecture. Right now you have many points that jump around a lot. Stick to the 5 section format recommended and fully develop all the points and transitions. Additionally the introduction and conclusion need development as well. See the example for specific ideas
Content: Work on fully developing your claims. You make some great points but follow through with evidence and examples to prove your points. Communication: Avoid using I or first person voice and approach it with a more formal tone. Work on developing the overall language of the argument.

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