paper## 3 is the one you are working on. the sample is just a guide. you have to refer to or you will miss the my point.

below is the comment the teacher gave, please fix it depending on:

1. Make sure the quotes support the point you're trying to make. In the section

below, you are talking about educating young Children, but the section you have

included from a source refers to older people:" Sharing knowledge with Young people motivate my new creative thinking. The

research by the University of Texas at Dallas states that. “Older adults who

learn a new, mentally demanding skill can improve their cognitive function.”

It is, therefore, a good way of learning."

2. You have a lot of statements but not many quotes to support them. You may want

to make two or three specific, clear points in the paragraph, then use sources

to support them. What you're saying is good, but you're filling the paragraph

with a lot of ideas that are not being supported by sources. So do more

quoting.(please add sources(quotation)to support specific points i make(if there are too many points i make in the paragraph, please delete you feel not appropriate and add your ideas and quoting the source you find to support )

3.And rather than talk about teaching in general, focus on the exact level that

you want to teach. Generalizations about teaching are not going to be as

helpful for you as discovering exactly what the job will entail. For example,

if you want to be an elementary school teacher, research that rather than

teaching in general.

4.please add the conclusion in last paragraph, i missed writing, Thank you

i also attach the sample that other's job （teacher said she did pretty good）, you can see as a guide. Thanks for hard working. if you do it well, i will offer tips

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